New Poem
I know that this may sound weird, but i dont actually remember writing this, but i know that i did, coz it was in my poem book, and in my handwriting. I think i may have written it on either friday (i think that was the night i took my sleepin tablet), but i not sure at all. Anyhow, here's the poem:
You approach me just to ask,
To see how I am going.
Do you really want to know?
I think not, so the lie keeps growing.
I'm alright, yeah, it's all good,
I assure you, I'm really okay.
But a cloud of darkness rests in my eyes
And yet you belief in me does stay
You see the marks on my arm
And ask if i fought with a rose.
I'll smile and nod, just like you want
Inside I wish for someone who knows.
Thats the original version, i may edit it later so that it fits better, but i dont know.
You approach me just to ask,
To see how I am going.
Do you really want to know?
I think not, so the lie keeps growing.
I'm alright, yeah, it's all good,
I assure you, I'm really okay.
But a cloud of darkness rests in my eyes
And yet you belief in me does stay
You see the marks on my arm
And ask if i fought with a rose.
I'll smile and nod, just like you want
Inside I wish for someone who knows.
Thats the original version, i may edit it later so that it fits better, but i dont know.
posted by Katie at Tuesday, March 07, 2006
7 Comments:
Don't edit it, NO EDITING!!! jk but maybe post the edited one again later as a 'compare & contrast' Lol, now I sound like a teacher.
lol i didnt mean i was gonna edit the actual meanin of the poem, only make it so it flows better
aw katie, you're so talented. that applies to all poems here down and here to the future.
no matter no editing allowed ;) this is your edit free blog zone ;)
thanx PSYCHO!! (hadnt called u that in a while and thought it was needed!) *hugz*
ok zarna, just for u i wont edit this one, or if i do edit the poem i'll repost it instead of editing it.
yeah, great poem *hugs*
keep being honest about your feelings, I'm here for you!!
great poems. you've got a real talent. would you mind if i attempt to put some of it to music? i'm just started to write some music, so i may not do justice to your work...
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